xanthan gum

i enjoyed this, but for some odd reason i didn't like how you followed every part of his body. it would have been better if, perhaps, you made the body ...

personally, i like the original version of your poem better, and that version i absolutely loved . it didn't hold a very deep, sensual meaning, but for that i can't ...

right. read a lot or apply some spell and grammer checks. for example: friends they can be loving, caring, and nice but the other times they can backstab you talk ...

ok, your vocabulary is outstanding. now, to build on that, you did hold my attention. another important point of poetry - rhythm. you need it...and it's not really here. well, ...

Only you, I and God know what you'll be you forced yourself to list these and for some odd reason, even being the shortest line, it was crowded. strange ladies ...

wordy, but nonetheless beautiful. it's annoying how i have to sit here and piece it apart, but it was worth. my favorite lines: i wanna be a coffee coloured brown ...

i completely understand this and can relate to it. ah, what it what be but what past of myself i would be missing... this expressed it completely truthfully, and for ...

I'VE HEARD THAT BEFORE where did you get it? how long ago did you write it? because, word for word, i thought that was so cool that i pasted it ...

well, you can't call it a tanka if it is not a tanka. so we'll hereby call it the short-tanka-like-poem-thing. otherwise, i think this is a good group of...though rather ...

you know what, this has got to be the first poem by you that i fully appreciated. you were fiery in emotional, showing true, uncliched anger - as it was ...

Pece peace Smashing there is no calm. Smashing, there is no calm i didn't like the ending. in fact, it didn't even sound like an ending. the point was not ...

straighten out the syllables in the first line. in fact, i think you need two new syllables, as "now" is usually added in demanding syllable poems such as this. that ...

okay, writersdomain got here first, so it's pretty much covered, but i would cut out this line from the second stanza: for time to stand still it's choppy and awkward. ...

um, i'd expand creativity. the subject matter of this poem is very bland, the description dry and well...it's not exactly a poem, is it? i suggest, first, that you read ...

i must admit, upon reading the title and the poem, i scoffed. i didn't think he was... that great. :oops: hha the poem is good. not high-quality, but otherwise fair.